On the VZW S4, the SD card is found at msm_sdcc.2, not msm_sdcc.3, so you might need to add a note about that in the card preparation section.
Have you (or has anyone else) tried using this with KitKat as stock? I see documentation about running kitkat when lollipop is stock, but what about running kitkat when kitkat is stock, or running lollipop when kitkat is stock? I haven't tried installing MultiSystem yet from KitKat, however I will if I don't hear from you shortly.
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